kokuyoyo: (And the cops are back.)
Chikusa ([personal profile] kokuyoyo) wrote in [community profile] thefarshore2018-05-15 05:31 pm

Heaven's BBS - Text

From: Anonymous
Date: November 21

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Things need to stop happening. It's exhausting and getting in the way of my writing. -keiyuki

- Chapter 1
- Chapter 2


[Not even cults can stop this romance novel from updating, thank you very much.]

It took nothing less than pulling rank, seniority, and actual threats to get Elio into the bathroom to do more than splash his face with a little water. Casimiro couldn't really say he enjoyed it although there was some satisfaction to winning. There wasn't much reason to stick around watching someone clean up. However, there also wasn't much reason to do anything else around his small apartment either. Anything else would just be more work. He could save that for the weekend. So he ended up inevitably drifting back to the bathroom where the door had been left open.

There was no need to be flustered or shy. Elio hadn't stripped for a full shower after all. He was simply kneeling on the ground with the detachable showerhead in one hand. Around his waist was where his uniform jacket hung limply. His head was bowed over the rim of the tub, water splattering against porcelain. One way or another, he seemed to hear Casimiro because he looked up with a twisted sulk on his face. "What, are you going to tell me that this isn't good enough either?"

"It's fine." Elio actually looked a little better with his hair wet like that instead of artificially slick. "Why did you even bother to use hair gel with it in the first place?" It had looked horrible. Elio clearly had to have picked that up.

The other man blinked at him. "That's what people do to look professional, right?"

"I didn't."

"What?!"

"Don't do that again. It looks horrible."

"You're not the superior of my hair!"


[After Elio finishes up cleaning up to be a little more suitable for returning to work, there's a small scene where he noses around Casimiro's apartment. Casimiro doesn't seem to see the point in it, with the narration explicitly stating that it's a plain and spartan place. It seems like the route back to the police headquarters will go by smoothly when their car passes by what looks like a crime scene in one of the smaller side streets, with a couple of other police vehicles nearby. Casimiro and Elio both get out to investigate it, and offer any assistance they can to one of the cops already there (who Casimiro notes as not being a part of the same unit). Their offer of help is refused, which Casimiro finds odd, and this is where the narration begins to explain more about his particular unit.]

[The Giallo Unit is one specifically meant for various shifters, and is filled with them all the way to the top- including Casimiro's superior Deacon Caputo. Casimiro notes that the "Giallo" title is more of a nickname given to them from other departments and the general public, calling back to the thriller-horror genre because of how mysterious and monstrous they're considered by regular people. Casimiro, in some internal narration, says that it's mildly annoying since everyone benefits from the Giallo Unit being in place.]

[According to the narration, due to their abilities when shifted and even enhanced senses when not, shifters in the police force are used as part bloodhounds for some, part snipers for others, and sometimes just SWAT-like muscle in other cases. They're used for emergency situations, such as bank robberies, and more difficult cases, such as murders, but also are expected to engage in regular patrol, especially when they're not on an active case. Casimiro gives the observation that this puts a lot more work on them, and they're expected to do well at it so that the overall public doesn't turn on them.]

[With all that exposition out of the way, Casimiro gets ready to leave....]


Well it was no problem to him if they didn't want his help. Even within the police were people who found it uncomfortable to be around shifters too much. Casimiro had raised his hand to the sunglasses perched on his face but let it swing down. He could go right back to headquarters like he had told dispatch with no issue. "Then we'll be leaving," he told the other officer plainly and turned away. It took him a second to realize that Elio wasn't immediately following. The other man was instead prowling around the edges of the scene. As he went to go get him, Casimiro noted he way he was scowling. "What is it?"

Elio's nostrils flared. "Something smells weird," he grumbled as he finally took mind of Casimiro. He at least began to follow him even though his shoulders were hunched. "I don't like it."

It figured that a canine shifter would be like that. Casimiro always thought they were a little more superstitious than most other shifters. "It's out of our department for now," he told him plainly as he went to the driver's side of his car. "Let's go."
kagenonadeshiko: (playful; teasing)

[personal profile] kagenonadeshiko 2018-05-16 12:52 am (UTC)(link)
[For once, Ayumu isn't anon. But she desperately needs to cheer herself up a little so why not indulge in a little good-natured teasing? Of course, she knows exactly who the author is but she's not cruel enough to out him.]

i've been wondering something, keiyuki-san.
where do you get the inspiration for your characters?
casimiro and elio remind me of someone
but i can't quite put my finger on who.
kagenonadeshiko: (perceptive; influence judo)

[personal profile] kagenonadeshiko 2018-05-16 01:14 am (UTC)(link)
[Very good, Chikusa! She'll have to allow an extra beanie reward to the shopping spree he's already earned through his excellent interrogation work.

Well, once she can afford it and isn't just crashing at Lavi's until she either picks a new god or gets reassigned again.]


those shows sound interesting.
have any recommendations?


[Maybe it'll help her understand how this whole partnership thing is supposed to work better.]
kagenonadeshiko: (content to serve)

[personal profile] kagenonadeshiko 2018-05-16 08:28 pm (UTC)(link)

i can read them just fine.
so anything would be great.

[It's better than moping around.]
kagenonadeshiko: (softening; tenderhearted)

[personal profile] kagenonadeshiko 2018-05-20 11:01 pm (UTC)(link)
[That's quite a list. But it'll keep her busy for a while.]

thanks.
i'll look into them.
good luck with your story, keiyuki-kun.
kagenonadeshiko: (happy; peaceful days)

[personal profile] kagenonadeshiko 2018-05-21 01:21 am (UTC)(link)
i'll look forward to the next update.

[As long as you don't tell on her and Hakkai, she won't tell on you, Chikusa.]
Edited 2018-05-21 01:21 (UTC)
doodlebuginette: (wow)

[personal profile] doodlebuginette 2018-05-16 01:27 am (UTC)(link)
[She's not even anon for this, because why would she be?]

I'm personally enjoying your story, Keiyuki!
But I generally admire the people who are able to sit and write so much because I don't really have the attention span for it.
So I just wanted to say - KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
and don't listen to the people giving you a hard time. I need more.
doodlebuginette: (content)

[personal profile] doodlebuginette 2018-05-16 03:09 am (UTC)(link)
[Why yes, Chikusa, she really is this aggressively supportive and cheerful to just about everyone. Unless that someone is Chloe.]

Are you having trouble? I'm not really much of a writer, but maybe I can help. :)
erogappa: (deadpan -- this place is dullsville)

ANON so very anon

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 01:54 am (UTC)(link)
get to the good stuff already
erogappa: (action -- chillin in bed)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
it's a romance story. that means there's a little bit of talking about who everyone is, and then they screw.

like the dumb one's ex comes into town and they screw and make the stuck up one jealous, and then the dumb one and the stuck up one screw a bunch. do it like that. it will be better that way.
erogappa: (dotting -- eh he he warui)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 02:40 am (UTC)(link)
it's a romance story. it's supposed to be porn.
erogappa: (smile -- kanyeshrug)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 02:52 am (UTC)(link)
Do what you like. You would get more people reading if it got sexy though.
erogappa: (smoking -- but then i got hiiiigh)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 02:56 am (UTC)(link)
so write it good. it's not hard.
erogappa: (smoking -- but then i got hiiiigh)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:02 am (UTC)(link)
nope. you're the writer, i'm the reviewer.
erogappa: (smirk -- yeeeeeah i'm good)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:55 am (UTC)(link)
oh, i'm not doing your homework then, asshole.
erogappa: (dotting -- and nothing but)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 04:07 am (UTC)(link)
it's a figure of speech
erogappa: (angry -- no that's not what I said)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 04:18 am (UTC)(link)
your story sucks
erogappa: (angry -- no that's not what I said)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:31 pm (UTC)(link)

what's that got to do with anything?

erogappa: (look -- nyah)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:36 pm (UTC)(link)

no it doesn't. if i was getting laid i would still want to read porn.

erogappa: (angry -- tch)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:45 pm (UTC)(link)

i just would okay?

erogappa: (angry -- no kitty that's my pot pie)

[personal profile] erogappa 2018-05-16 03:56 pm (UTC)(link)

well if i ever get laid i'll be sure and explain it to you

[ If Chikusa is at Li Tieguai's temple, he might hear Gojyo slamming down the stairs, cursing under his breath, and storming out into the yard to go find something non-electronic to do. ]

unlucky7: (STATUS :: Cute)

Anonymous

[personal profile] unlucky7 2018-05-16 05:24 am (UTC)(link)
I'm the anon that gave all the sniping advice, glad to see you're still continuing the story! Keep up the good work!
unlucky7: (STATUS :: Hopeful)

[personal profile] unlucky7 2018-05-18 09:36 pm (UTC)(link)
I believe so. I think it's interesting to see the perception of shifters within the police and by the general public. It fleshes out the world nicely.
unlucky7: (STATUS :: Cheerful)

[personal profile] unlucky7 2018-05-30 06:50 am (UTC)(link)
Assuming things don't keep getting in the way, shooting for another update next month?
unlucky7: (STATUS :: Attentive)

[personal profile] unlucky7 2018-05-31 02:17 am (UTC)(link)
I hear you there. Feels like something is exploding every other week.

Any idea how long the story will be? Do you have an outline or are you making it up as you go along?